Not bad! Appologies for the unrequested constructive(?) criticism, but I think I like the start better than the ending though -- by the end there's too much action going on outside of her head and the impact of "see what happens when you don't love me" line is kinda lost.
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Date: 2006-01-20 12:26 am (UTC)I'm curious to see the next versions...